Watch out – they bite!
August 28th, 2006This was based on an incident that happened at work when a coworker got a papercut from a fortune cookie fortune. I thought it was pretty funny in a slightly twisted way. The events were rearranged so that it was a couple having take out at night, but the dark omen is still there. What do you all think? Is it a little more interesting? I liked the coloring- does it work? Also, does anyone have any confusion in regards to how to read the progression of panels? I thought it was pretty clear, but that same coworker found it confusing.
Let me know what you think!
August 28th, 2006 at 7:46 am
A little…
I would suggest having the bubble in the first panel on the right side of the girls head. Then have that bubble slightly overlap into the second panel to “make” the reader go where you want.
Then you could connect the two speech bubbles. Or have the guy say “What’s Wrong?” then have the girl in the scond panel say what is wrong with a bubble under the table in panel two.
Third panel fine.
Fourth panel… Place “Dammit!” under the fortune instaed of above.
That way the art will “sell” the joke, and the girl’s dialog acts as more of a “sigh”. If that makes any sense.
But to be honest I have a horrible time directing the reader myself, so evrything I just typed should be taken with a huge grain of salt. Wait… make that a huge salt block!
Like teh color and it suits the “Mood” and subject well.
Would have been good to have seen the same scene played out at the police station with the “witch” while she was getting booked. She could have bummed the cookie off the cop’s desk.
Great strip!
August 28th, 2006 at 12:27 pm
I’m sorry to see Mad Cackle pass! Hopefully you’ll revisit at some point to let us know what they’re up to!
I’ve enjoyed seeing your strip come from it’s humble beginnings, scratched on the pages of little used school books, to highway overpasses, to the backs of slow-moving public transit busses, finally into a full-fledged, fast-moving motion picture.
I thought you’d gone in a daring direction when you let them cast Mel Gibson as Igor, but realized, with the addition of Brittney as Imelda and Owen Wilson as Stewart, that you’ve been inhaling your inks just a bit too long , and April may need to start monitoring your work schedules!
I liked the little touches within your drawings ( Imelda had a helmet while flying! ) that showed your really were thinking about the details. Yes, it is obvious the changes and adjustments in character & style on the strip, but with only 50 strips to look thru, there isn’t the large body of work to balance “the early years†against and call it the “Evolution of Your Artâ€.
Of course, I also had an example on one of my WALLS that should have been a big ‘ol “Warning Will Robinson, Warning!â€
If you’d ever worked with DaVinci ( He STILL owes me 50 lira… “Oooo, I forgota my wallet again! Woulda YOU mind paying fora dinner… I’ll getta it nexta time-aâ€â€¦ RIGHT… the Bastard ! ), you would have seen 100, 150 drafts of the Mona Lisa crumpled up and tossed all over the apartment ( along with the airplane & body part models… The man was a PIG… Do you KNOW what vacuuming up wet oils and modeling glue will do to even a Dyson over a couple decades ?!?!? VOIDS that warranty real quick! the Bastard ! ), because it was always a work in progress.
Writing can be tough, especially when the drawings you love rely on the situations you put them in. Few things that I’ve ever wrote stayed in anywhere NEAR their original form… mainly because my brain worked quicker than I could write. ( And, YES, I do mean that I am old enough to have blisters from the hammer and chisel… but we only had seven words then, so it balanced. ) The word processor was the greatest thing for me to just toss ideas out then play with them at leisure. You young’uns got it easy, dag-nabbitt @!$#~* !
I see your next entry, and like the pretext as well!
As always, Chip, you’ve got my support ( as long as you don’t’ ask for money… Leo has that ( the Bastard ! ) ! )
Bob
August 29th, 2006 at 9:01 am
Hmmm… I’ve always heard that about Leo. Now I know it’s all true!
September 3rd, 2006 at 5:09 am
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